Notes on WIP 2 13/03/24

Notes on WIP 2

• need to cut earlier to avoid faces, it’s not about the individual, obscuring identity to emphasise the ‘entity’

• 1:50-3:17 need more detail shots and close ups, dynamism, to break up the monotony of repetition of hands and membranes.

• 3:15 singular membrane dancer should stand up here, false climax. Sheet remains in tact at this point so should try for chronology. Ideas for composition, music comes down, very small eerie sounds in the black, maybe building screams?

• Then leading into it shuddershot of hands @ 3:18 followed by silence. Dark then boom, viewer shocked / brought back into narrative.

• After sheet rip, slow it all down with slow mo footage. More dramatic, feels more cinematic and powerful.

• Building to music climax, movement getting more frantic with solo dancer, slow motion detail shots.

• 3:53 hands much slower and cropped more

• Overall could do with more cropped detail shots, increase cutting temp, less ‘drag’ as it goes through.

• Ending, static trio ?